1.) Malik Madison stepped into a Marine corp training camp with the thought of walking in his fathers footsteps and turning his life around. The story begins with Malik at his fathers funeral at the age of 14 years old where he sees other members of the Marine corp carry his fathers dead body. Maliks father named Duke died on duty well in Iraq with his team only two marines survived the mission to Iraq. Malik's eyes were locked onto the two marines as he saw them bury his father. At this point in his life Malik decided it was time to turn his life around and live a life that would make his father proud. Even with Maliks new life style choices he was already in way to deep to escape his drug addiction. Malik had a long time girlfriend named Eliza that he told about what he was planning on doing once he became of age. Eliza cried and did not want him to leave her but at the same time she knew she had no other choice than to respect his decision. After this the story will head to Malik's 18th birthday party where he will tell his mother that he wants to join the Marines and pick up where his father left off. Maliks mother was scared about losing another member to the war but she told him " You can do whatever you want and you know I will always be here supporting you". With these words Malik would go through the recruiting stages of joining the USMC including meeting with a recruiter and many physical and citizen background tests. The scene will than go to Malik's first day in the USMC training base where he will meet a Russian boy named Demetri.
2.) Malik is found on a list of wanted officers by a man named Carter who was a member of Duke's old team that went to Iraq. Carter was given a recon mission in Germany to investigate an old Nazi lab that was abandoned years ago. The USA has its suspicions that the lab is being used in order to resurrect the old Nazi regime into the new world. Carter chose the people that he believed to the experts of their field and Malik was chose to be his Sniper/Scout. Its true that Malik was technically new to the military but he knew his father well and saw training exercises that Malik took part in during training. The team that was selected by Carter went to a deployment base in New york where they would get to know each other better and prepare for their mission. This is Malik's first mission in the USMC and it will be one that he will never forget. The lab isn't what the USA thought it to be there is so much more growing in Germany than what was originally believe to be.
3.) 1. Conflict between Erik the Electronics expert of the team and Malik. Erik has no respect for Malik and does not think he should be a higher rank than him when he just joined the Military.
2. Disappearance of the Platoon Leader Carter and Heavy weapons expert Thomas.
3. Radio to base being cut off with no way to contact the Marine head quarters or Navy ships.
4. Locked down inside of the lab.
5. Death of Carter and Thomas.
4.) Demetri turns out to be a Nazi spy named Franz who was only with the team in order to pick them all off one by one and take Malik back to his father. Franz kidnaps Erik and orders the capture of Malik and to kill Frank but he needs Malik alive. Franz tells Malik that the group known as Die wiedergeburt is a reborn version of the old Nazi regime and they need him to help bring it to victory. Franz has no plans to kill Erik all that he desires is to use him as a threat to get Malik to follow his wishes. Malik is than backed into a corner with only Frank to assist him , Erik being kidnapped and his leader and new friend dead somewhere in the lab.
5.) The climax is followed up with Erik finding his own way to breaking out of the hostage situation that was created by Franz. With Erik out of harms way Malik no longer has to be sneaky or watch his actions that he takes against Franz. The fight between these two old friends turns into a match to the death with Franz comes to terms with the fact that Malik will never join him. In the end Malik ends up out sniping Franz the one thing that Malik could do better than Franz can. Franz is than defeated and the communication block is than destroyed and the USA government is able to be contacted by team Alpha.
6.) The team is rescued by the USA Navy which than transport them back to an army base to report exactly what happened at Germany. Malik explains how Demetri was really a Nazi traitor and eventually leaded up into the story about the death of Thomas and Carter. While explaining the story the members of team Alpha decided that they want to take the responsibility of telling the family's what happened to there family members. Frank and Erik go to tell Thomas's family what happened and Malik takes the duty of telling Carter's parents. Malik is ashamed of Carters parents for only to pretend to care about their son and his life after his life is already lost and it is already to late. The group meets up at the very end of the story again at the same military base where they all met Malik is put in permanent charge of team Alpha. The team has been given the mission to putting an end to the rise of the new Nazi regime and Malik must choose three new soldiers to replace the spots of his old friends.
This is quite good and well developed, you seem to have a lot of detail for the story in mind. However, I think you should include some more internal conflict for Malik over the course of the entire story. It sort of seems like he has problems with drugs, etc at the beginning but then they all sort of just go away.
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